W.A.L.T recall events through the eyes of an animal.
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My Worst day ever
It was a sunny day in the African Savannah. I'm very excited! In my herd, my papa and my mama are the biggest buffalo ever and me I’m just a calf. But one day I’m gonna be the biggest buffalo ever. We like to go in the river bank because the river bank is nice and cold.
Suddenly my dad shouted “Run!” I felt really scared, because I can see and smell the lions behind me. Then they got me and I thought that I was going to die and the lion grabbed me near the water. Next a crocodile came out of the water and grabbed my tail. The lion and the crocodile began to fight over me.
Then the lions won the fight and dragged me out of the water. The lion still had me, but then my papa called all the big buffalo to come and fight the lions. My papa was very angry and he rammed the lions. Then the lion ran and hid.
I’ve never been this happy before, because my papa and my mama didn't give up at me. I am back to the herd and I am very happy because I am a live
Hi Sofia I like yuo'ur story about the calfnlion and the crockdale.I like the part when you said It was a sunny day in the African Savannah. What is yuo'ur favourite part of the story?
ReplyDeleteAmazing work Sofia, I like how you put many details about it. But some of it doesn't make sense and you didn't explain the fight about the crocodile and the lions.
ReplyDeletehi sofia your story is amazing and i like your about the calfnlion and the crocodile that was my like story
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