Sofia's space chimp

W.A.L.T write a narrative Success CriteriaI know I will be successful when….The title is suitable for the text.The orientation tells who the story is about, and when and where the story happened The complication describes a problem and explains what happened next.

• The resolution explains how the problem was solved.

                                                      First Draft

3, 2 ,1, Boom!!! 1961, I  was sent into space by Mark, he is my trainer. Not only that he is my only friend. Mark gave me a picture of us  together. I take it everywhere I go. Yes, I am a chimp and my name is Jake. They sent me to  space to see if chimps can survive for 65 years. This is more safe than sending people to space, well safer for humans not chimps. I was asleep for a long time…..

65 years later

I wake up and see the photo of Mark and I. I can see the stars shining all around me. But I do not remember why I am here and I see how many years and hours I have been here for. 65 years and 22 hours! Now I remember why I am here, Mark sent me in here to go to my home. Oh I said I see something shining in my eyes. I look carefully I said I think is something round, I shouted it is the earth. I can go home. Then I am really happy because I can go back to my home. But I don't know what to press. I look around at the rocket. I think this is the button and then I press the button. The rocket went Boom!!! I said what was that, I think I pressed the wrong button. Then I went really fast go to the earth.my heart is beteing like a dram and  my Body all going Fire words at my cher and than the parachute come out of  my rocke. The parachute helped me to  go to the earth. meri seif to land in. then I land in the earth. Then my rocket land in the earth and then I come out of my rocker before i come out in my rocket I close  my eyes and count to 5 and i count to 5 and go out of my rocket and then i open  my eyes and see the earth. The earth is looks like a old flower I said this is a bayram this is barren and than I close my eyes and count to 3 1,2,3... I open my slowly and scary place this is just a barren I open my eyes and it just and barren
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Sofia's speech bubbles

W.A.L.T- read between the lines and guess what people are thinking and feeling

     

my group we all made a speech bubble this in reading we have to do is we have a book 

and have to fad the story  

Sofia's DLO

W.A.L.T  use different strategies to solve division problems  

I use my stage 6 and stage 4 because stage 6 and 4 stage is really easy to use

at divide divide stage 6 is times tables stage 4 is skip counting.

   

My prefxieis

This is my prefixes

This is my learning goals

This is my  learning goals from the start of the year to show my dad. I hope you like it.

     W.A.L.T recall  events through the eyes of an animal.

second Draft

My Worst day ever

It was a sunny day in the African Savannah.  I'm very excited! In my herd, my papa and my mama are the biggest buffalo ever and  me I’m just a calf. But one day I’m  gonna be the biggest buffalo ever.  We like to go in the river bank because the river bank  is nice and cold.

Suddenly my dad shouted “Run!” I felt really scared, because I can see and smell the lions behind me. Then they got me and I thought that I was going to die and the lion grabbed me near the water. Next a crocodile came out of the water and grabbed my tail. The lion and the crocodile began to fight over me.

Then the lions won the fight and dragged me out of the water. The lion still had me, but then my papa called all the big buffalo to come and fight the lions. My papa was very angry and he rammed the lions. Then the lion ran and hid.  

I’ve never been this happy before, because my papa and my mama didn't give up at me. I am back to the herd and I am very happy because I am a live  

Battle at Kruger National Park Sequence.

W.A.L.T recall events in order.

	The herd of buffalo are walking along the river bank.
	A pride of  lions are resting in the sun.
	The lions see the buffalo and crouch to hide.
	The lions start chasing the buffalo.
	The lions get baby buffalo in the river bank and a crocodile tries to steal it.
	The Group of buffalo  surrounded the lions.
	Father buffalo is tries to get baby buffalo.
	The baby Buffalo is rescued by the herd of buffalo.