Sofia's space chimp

W.A.L.T write a narrative Success CriteriaI know I will be successful when….The title is suitable for the text.The orientation tells who the story is about, and when and where the story happened The complication describes a problem and explains what happened next.

• The resolution explains how the problem was solved.

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3, 2 ,1, Boom!!! 1961, I  was sent into space by Mark, he is my trainer. Not only that he is my only friend. Mark gave me a picture of us  together. I take it everywhere I go. Yes, I am a chimp and my name is Jake. They sent me to  space to see if chimps can survive for 65 years. This is more safe than sending people to space, well safer for humans not chimps. I was asleep for a long time…..

65 years later

I wake up and see the photo of Mark and I. I can see the stars shining all around me. But I do not remember why I am here and I see how many years and hours I have been here for. 65 years and 22 hours! Now I remember why I am here, Mark sent me in here to go to my home. Oh I said I see something shining in my eyes. I look carefully I said I think is something round, I shouted it is the earth. I can go home. Then I am really happy because I can go back to my home. But I don't know what to press. I look around at the rocket. I think this is the button and then I press the button. The rocket went Boom!!! I said what was that, I think I pressed the wrong button. Then I went really fast go to the earth.my heart is beteing like a dram and  my Body all going Fire words at my cher and than the parachute come out of  my rocke. The parachute helped me to  go to the earth. meri seif to land in. then I land in the earth. Then my rocket land in the earth and then I come out of my rocker before i come out in my rocket I close  my eyes and count to 5 and i count to 5 and go out of my rocket and then i open  my eyes and see the earth. The earth is looks like a old flower I said this is a bayram this is barren and than I close my eyes and count to 3 1,2,3... I open my slowly and scary place this is just a barren I open my eyes and it just and barren
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